Showing posts with label EXCISION. Show all posts
Showing posts with label EXCISION. Show all posts

Thursday, 17 March 2011

(2nd) Drunk At First Sight Blogfest




OMG!!! Yet another Blogfest. It's kind of exciting that I have a few days' break after this one. But I signed up, and I couldn't resist going ahead with it. Click on the picture. Go on, I dare ya!

The requirements of this delightful one are:

2) Write a new scene or short story, or dust off an old one, about a love/relationship/situation that also includes one or more of the following elements:

---St. Paddy's Day as important event or setting
---Use of Ireland or anything Irish as a setting or prop
---An alcohol related event (party, hangover, cocktails, AA meeting, etc.)

3) Just prior to March 17th (St. Pat's Day), post said story to your blog.

4) On St. Paddy's Day, cruise around the interwebs, drink in hand, and check out everybody's amazing fiction.


I've chosen to share a pre-written scene (which I have only barely edited, and is mostly a rough draft) from one of the SUNDOWN novels. It fits the third option, an alcohol-related event. It's from my rock star princess's point of view (not the MC from book 1 whose heartache you saw in a recent blogfest), and I just love the scenes between her and Danny. Though this one isn't nearly my favourite.

I opened the bathroom door, thinking that maybe now I could call Jared and get away with most of my pride in tact, but before I could take another step, I saw him in the doorway, Danny, his arms full of paper bags from which tantalising smells were rising. He smiled at me in delight, but the smile slowly faded as he took in my appearance.

“You look terrible,” he said softly.

I wanted to slap him, but it would’ve hurt my head too much. I just glared. “Gee, thanks.”

“I didn’t mean it that way. I just meant…you look like you’re sick.”

I am fucking sick, you moron! I would have dearly loved to yell, but my tender state disallowed it.

“Here,” he said, shuffling into the kitchen and dumping the bags of whatever food he’d bought in there. He hastened back to me and put his hands on my arms—his warm, dry, strong hands. The work those hands had done last night… I shivered, and it hurt my head. My stomach, too. I would have glared if that wouldn’t have caused me more pain.

“Why don’t you lie down?” he said gently. “I don’t think you got enough sleep.”

“I’m in danger of vomiting everywhere,” I warned him grumpily.

He just smiled and leaned in to kiss my cheek, infuriating me but not sufficiently that I could summon the strength to throw his hands off. “Come on,” he murmured, and I absolutely hated that I loved the sound of that voice—rich, deep, rumbling. He knew how to growl with that voice, too.

I blocked out memories that were far more tantalising than even the scents coming from the kitchen and closed my eyes as he led me towards the bed. In spite of the fact that I couldn’t see where I was going and that he had two left feet that made even walking down the street a challenge for him, he managed to get me back to the bed without bumping me into anything. He also kept his own feet, a miracle in itself.

“Lie down here. Is your head all right?”

“It kills,” I told him in a self-pitying whimper, and he crooned sympathy and stroked my face, making me shiver again. I didn’t want to shiver, damn it! Shivering hurt!

“Lie down. Just lie down and sleep.”

I sank onto the bed, and somehow it felt nearly as comfortable as the bed back in my executive suite. I wondered how that could be, when last night and even this morning it had felt so lumpy and…inferior.

“Sleep, love,” his voice murmured, and it was already sounding much further away than expected. Love? “You just sleep now. Relax. You can relax.”

And it seemed he wasn’t lying. I could and did relax, and in moments I was gone.


And now I must dash, for I am seeing Unwritten Law tonight! Woo!

Wednesday, 15 December 2010

His 'n hers novels

The problem with writing a novel from your female MC's point of view, and then writing a second novel covering the same events, but from your male lead's point of view? Editing one means you've messed up the other. Right now I am working on editing the heck out of the first, and I truly hope to have every single line of dialogue decided upon, before I ever get around to editing the 'mirror' novel.

It's hard to truly decide on what my characters are going to say, and when. When it comes to Jared, sometimes he talks too much. He's not like that. He isn't a social creature, deep down inside, though over the years he's learned to fake it incredibly well. So he needs to talk less, at least in the beginning. As Louise draws him out of his shell, naturally he will start talking more. But that's got to take time. He has good reason not to trust (he doesn't trust anyone, not even himself), and no matter how comfortable he may start to feel around her, he is never truly comfortable. Not until book 5. Here I'm talking about books 1 and 3. Book 2 is a prequel, documenting Jared's earlier days. Confusing?

So, yeah...Jared talks too much. And this is because, as I have discovered, I talk too much. Only in my writing. In reality I am rather sparing with what I say. But when it comes to writing, I can bloat out a story with the best of them. This is how I've managed to cut 19k from SUNDOWN so far. And I have no doubt I can cut a lot more, just by saying the same things in less words.

In future, then, Jared will talk less. Louise will probably continue to ramble, because he makes her nervous. He will continue to misunderstand things, no matter how far he's come since the early days. And I love how far he's come. The prequel, documenting his early days when he first met Adelai, was incredibly fun to write. His social ineptitude is one of my favourite things about him. And I don't want to lose that, just because he's meant to be better at faking nowadays. Jared = ineptitude.

So, in a nutshell...

Step 1: Get SUNDOWN dialogue so perfect I love every single line my characters say (slowly but surely getting there at present).
Step 2: Face the daunting task of editing SUNDOWN.

P.S. Gotta do Reverb10 week 2 next!

Tuesday, 14 December 2010

Writing G O A L S + 2011

2009 Achievements:
1. Finished off DAPHNE, after 10 years of writing it (I was 19 when I began, and 29 when I finished). Still needs editing!
2. Wrote little bits and pieces of stories, and edited bits and pieces of others, during the year, until November, when...
3. During NaNoWriMo I finished a 116,000 word story (the first in the Midnight SUNDOWN series) and quickly started in on its prequel, for which I wrote about 20k before the end of November

2010 Achievements:
1. Completed 3 novels in the Midnight SUNDOWN series, then realised that the 2nd novel actually needed to be divided in 2. The second half of it made a complete novel, but the first half needed some better ending. I still haven't given it that.
2. Started book 4 (which since the division of book 2 became book 5) in the Midnight SUNDOWN series, and still have not finished it.
3. Completed first revision of SUNDOWN, taking word count from 116,000 to 147,000. Yikes.
4. Cut about 19k from SUNDOWN during 2nd revision (have not finished this revision, but hoping to get there in the next week or so).
5. Participated in NaNoWriMo 2010, and won with a 94k novel.

And now onto the point of this blog entry: things I want to achieve in 2011.

Things I know I can do in 2011
1. Finish current edit of Sundown and order a proof copy of it via CreateSpace (this is free!!)
2. Participate in NaNoEdMo 2011, working either on book 4 of the Midnight SUNDOWN series, or my DAPHNE novel - at the moment I'm leaning further towards concentrating on Daphne
3. Participate/run the short story year-long workshop project with my critiquing buddies, possibly will be showcase this on Blogger - the Chrysalis Experiment
4. Keep my writing blog at Blogspot going & hopefully prospering a bit
5. Win NaNo 2011
6. Finish off first draft of STORM from the Midnight SUNDOWN series
7. Maybe look at doing a preliminary read-through/edit of Nausicaa (NaNo '10 novel)

Things I'd like to look at but probably will not get done in 2011
1. Preliminary edits of FIRE and EXCISION from the Midnight SUNDOWN novels
2. Figure out how to finish off CARNIVAL from the Midnight SUNDOWN novels series
3. Finish off 2008's NaNo novel (TURKEY BOURKE)
4. Get through 1st proper edit of SQUEAKY

Things I KNOW I will not get done in 2011
1. Finish off RAGEWATER book 1
2. Finish off SOMANA from the RAGEWATER series (probably has 40k to go)