tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post1120640992813379373..comments2024-03-10T16:45:38.711+08:00Comments on WORD + STUFF: The Nature of Magic BlogfestTrishahttp://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-29750615653771735842011-03-30T10:10:50.250+08:002011-03-30T10:10:50.250+08:00Cheers Rosie :) This was in the middle of the nove...Cheers Rosie :) This was in the middle of the novel, well probably closer to the end. So yeah...Trishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-55131274775203078682011-03-29T23:42:14.324+08:002011-03-29T23:42:14.324+08:00Ack! Dark and eerie. It speaks of so much more goi...Ack! Dark and eerie. It speaks of so much more going on here. I'm definitely intrigued. Thanks for sharing :)RosieChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07911305246379355484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-48177765338011249112011-03-29T08:19:04.332+08:002011-03-29T08:19:04.332+08:00Thanks guys! :D
The irony about this story is tha...Thanks guys! :D<br /><br />The irony about this story is that I've written most of it, and only now am thinking I need to make some kind of outline/plan for it so I can rewrite it completely :PTrishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-69543577586740419712011-03-29T08:16:12.495+08:002011-03-29T08:16:12.495+08:00The last bit was really interesting with the souls...The last bit was really interesting with the souls being part of the magic--nice! Thanks for participating!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-15498641852853323162011-03-29T06:53:05.198+08:002011-03-29T06:53:05.198+08:00nice! Love the magic & the setup! I do agree o...nice! Love the magic & the setup! I do agree on the who's-the-MC question, though - but that would vanish in edits. <br /><br />Thank you for sharing! <br /><br />Tessa.x<br /><br />ps. please do pop in on the 30th to vote on the finalists!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046724975658216337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-5160651558165421562011-03-28T23:41:34.742+08:002011-03-28T23:41:34.742+08:00Oh, that last paragraph gave me chills! Great set ...Oh, that last paragraph gave me chills! Great set up. And I like the description of her as "the snow woman" - this is so intriguing! I would def. read more!Margo Berendsenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03476308235642890474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-49072331556698615642011-03-28T23:16:02.662+08:002011-03-28T23:16:02.662+08:00Hi Trisha! What a wonderful epic fantasy piece! Yo...Hi Trisha! What a wonderful epic fantasy piece! You have a real gift for names, I especially like Briseis! :) Love the concept of souls being trapped in stone...that's GOOD!!!Autumn Shelleyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04783445897373737521noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-69055328992295224352011-03-28T09:08:32.377+08:002011-03-28T09:08:32.377+08:00magic in an epic fantasy - love it. what a twist t...magic in an epic fantasy - love it. what a twist to have souls trapped in a stone.Michelle Gregoryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05747275507200268417noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-22940490340616545342011-03-28T08:04:56.748+08:002011-03-28T08:04:56.748+08:00Thanks for all your comments guys :)
Though if yo...Thanks for all your comments guys :)<br /><br />Though if you had any idea what a mess the overall story is, you'd probably be happy not to be seeing more :PTrishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-59806429516202016752011-03-28T06:32:05.679+08:002011-03-28T06:32:05.679+08:00Oooooo, shivers! Here I was on a lazy Sunday after...Oooooo, shivers! Here I was on a lazy Sunday afternoon, thinking "Oh, a nice magic excerpt," and BAM! I was thrown right into this and have questions that now have to linger. Boo on you for not posting more and great job!Jesshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14121018905141253640noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-80359656981339688162011-03-28T02:14:22.768+08:002011-03-28T02:14:22.768+08:00Yikes!!!
I so feel for that woman. She not only to...Yikes!!!<br />I so feel for that woman. She not only took a serious risk, but she sacrificed her afterlife as well. I like this. It reminds me that magic can't be used without paying a price, especially a forbidden one.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-14821820933797748602011-03-28T01:45:32.997+08:002011-03-28T01:45:32.997+08:00I love the concept of the souls being used for mag...I love the concept of the souls being used for magic. Gives it a very primal feeling, and highly risky too, which makes it more exciting to read about.<br />As for the character, I imagine once I knew a little bit more of the storyline I'd be able to keep them straight. It's always kind of hard getting thrown into the middle.<br />Overall, I really enjoyed it. Fascinating.Lindz Pagelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04663646312808701883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-59119773630220935592011-03-27T17:15:12.805+08:002011-03-27T17:15:12.805+08:00Thanks PK. At least you know you're not the on...Thanks PK. At least you know you're not the only confused one :D<br /><br />Laura, thanks :) Maybe someday it'll be worthy of being read. lolTrishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-73066748274298726232011-03-27T17:09:16.309+08:002011-03-27T17:09:16.309+08:00I love the concept! The writing is great... yeah, ...I love the concept! The writing is great... yeah, I could get confused with the characters, but often is the case with high fantasy. <br />I still love your magical elements, and the names are very unique. :)PK HREZOhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11650153097981426833noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-15094056532010523572011-03-27T14:34:19.788+08:002011-03-27T14:34:19.788+08:00Hi there. I really liked the ideas in this exerpt....Hi there. I really liked the ideas in this exerpt. Would love to read the whole story. LxLaurahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03604785269958873474noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-21284913082208782812011-03-27T12:53:56.104+08:002011-03-27T12:53:56.104+08:00Hi Brooke - yeah, you're right about the chara...Hi Brooke - yeah, you're right about the characters. it was even worse before my hasty edit, with POV changes and the like. :D<br /><br />Because it's an excerpt from the middle of a scene it is a little more confusing, but in the scene overall I was confusing myself. It's been a long time since I did any serious editing of this story, so it's pretty far behind compared with other works. ;)Trishahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16927558937796802496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-238481189278119116.post-57972168125101168232011-03-27T11:47:11.316+08:002011-03-27T11:47:11.316+08:00It's a nice excerpt Trisha but there are quite...It's a nice excerpt Trisha but there are quite a few characters. Perhaps it's better if I've read the whole book so that each character has meaning to me and they are all introduced separately or in pairs.<br /><br />I am also not entirely sure who the main character is. This scene seems to be focusing on Callihroe but is she the main character of the whole novel or just this scene? I realize this is in third person but you should still show a slight favoring to the MC, if just by showing a few feelings or something of the sort.<br /><br />I like your names though some may not because of pronunciation, and I like how the Bowfynntine magic is used. Very original.Brooke R. Bussehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17147444223968856153noreply@blogger.com